1000000 Years to Live

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Leo rushed in and grabbed his nephew, Sirius, before he too was destroyed by the fire. He saved him that day. But not his father...

Leo was a great brown & grey wolf. He was one of the breed that lives seemingly forever. In this case, Leo would live for 1000000 years. A million years to live. There had been three of his kin alive, his brother, himself, and his nephew. Leo remembered quite clearly the day his brother died in the fire that had almost claimed his nephew too.
Sirius was a black cub. He was the nephew of Leo, son of Lupe. Sirius was still quite young. He hadn't even grown to HALF his full size yet. He had no markings of any particular sort, unlike most wolves.

"How long did your father tell you that you would live?" Leo asked the cub one day.
"Normal age of course." Sirius answered
"How old is normal?"
"Like about 10 years. Why? How old am I going to live to be?"
"You and I shall live to be one million years old. It's in our blood. If no disease touches us, and we aren't killed like your father, we'll do fine."

Leo remembered this conversation with his nephew very well. Sirius hadn't known of this 'million years to live' thing until that exact moment.
Sirius had always been a fine a fine cub, but knew little of what he should have known. Leo blamed Lupe for that.
Memories of Lupe stirred inside Leo's head. He remembered the first moment he remembered of he and Lupe playing. A good memory. Then his mind sped him up to Lupe's death. A death of fire.
All Leo thought of when this memory popped into his wolven mind was that at least he had died with the elements, and not by other wolven. He had not been murdered, he had died saving his son. He had almost not suceeded, had it not been for Leo.
After Sirius learned of the life of his kin, he held his head high, proud to know he would live for so long. It was the best gift he had ever been given to know this. He thanked his uncle very much for teaching him of what must be known.

"Leo," said Lupe, looking up at his brother, "Can you tell me something?"
"Of course, my brother," said Leo, "What is it?"
"Make sure," he said, "that when Sirius gets older, you take care of him if I leave him."
"Of course."

Leo remembered that conversation too. He kept his promised, but wondered if Lupe knew what would happen? This question popped up often, as the pair wondered through the Viti Forest.

I leave them here, waiting for answers of Lupe & his mysterious death.

[Magick]

Right, okay.
I'm going to seem like a total .a s s. saying this but-
Where the hell is the profile?
I mean; seriously.
This is just a history, if anything.
And a more detailed appearance is needed- as well as a personality, which this profile completely lacks.

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Leo is a brown & grey wolf with brown eyes. He's quite serious about who he is, and well, just about everything. He's 853 years old. He's an intelligent wolf, and is maybe sorta kinda searching for a mate.
Sirius is a black wolf, pure black, with silvery grey eyes. He's fun loving and his still a cub, who doesn't understand much yet, but is bound to grow to be quite intelligent.

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thanks for the tips

[Magick]

Better- but, you're still missing some things.
Like, their ages in appearance.
And more detailed personalities.
C'mon- 'quite serious about everything' and 'intelligent' really isn't enough for a profile.
o.o
Use www.dictionary.com for some 'big' words if you like. It'll make the profile seem less...well- just look around at some of the fantastic profiles (-cough-Havoc, Ceuseri and Raven to name a few-cough-), and you'll see what yours is lacking.

[Ceuseri]

You've left this board a fair while now.
I'll move it to Declined Bios.
If you adapt and imrpove it, it can be moved to Accepted Bios.

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Leo rushed in and grabbed his nephew, Sirius, before he too was destroyed by the killing flames. Leo saved him that day. But not Siruis' father...

Leo was a great brown & grey wolf. He was one of the breed that lives seemingly forever. In this case, Leo would live for 1000000 years. A million years to live. There had been three of his kin alive that he knew of, his brother, himself, and his nephew. Leo remembered quite clearly the day his brother perished in the fire that had almost claimed his nephew's short life too.
Sirius was a black cub. He was the nephew of Leo, son of Lupe. Sirius was still quite young. He hadn't even grown to HALF his full size yet. He had no markings of any particular sort, unlike most wolves. Sirius was four months old, and was growing not only larger, but wiser, by each day...

"How long did your father tell you that you would live?" Leo asked the cub one day.
"Normal age of course." Sirius answered
"How old is normal? To most wolven."
"Like about 10 years. But that's the lucky ones. Why? How old am I going to live to be?"
"You and I shall live to be one million years old. It's in our blood and. If no disease touches us, and we aren't killed like your father did in the flames we shall FOREVER hate, we'll do fine."

Leo remembered this conversation with his nephew very well. Sirius hadn't known of this 'million years to live' thing until that exact moment.
Sirius had always been a fine cub, but knew little of what he should have known. Leo blamed Lupe for that. He always had blamed him for things like that.
Why hadn't Lupe told Sirius of this? Would he ever have told his own son of his ancestors' power?
Memories of Lupe stirred inside Leo's wolven mind. He remembered the first moment he ever could think of of he and Lupe playing. A good memory. Then his mind sped him up to Lupe's death. A death of fire. A harsh, terrible, hatred-worthy way to die.
All Leo thought of when this memory popped into his wolven mind was that at least he had died with the elements, and not by other wolven. He had not been murdered, he had died saving his son. Lupe would have perished alongside Sirius, had Leo not dove in to save him at the exact moment. Leo was a hero to Sirius, ever since the terrible fire that had not only destroyed Lupe, but the whole pack.
After Sirius learned of the life of his kin, he held his head high, proud to know he would live for so long. It was the best gift he had ever been given to know this. He thanked his uncle very much for teaching him of what must be known. What confused Sirius was, why had no one told him of this remarkable feat?

"Leo," said Lupe, looking up at his brother, "Can you tell me something?"
"Of course, my brother," said Leo, "What is it?"
"Make sure," he said, "that when Sirius gets older, you take care of him if I leave him."
"Of course."

Leo remembered that conversation too. He kept his promised, but wondered if Lupe knew what would happen? This question popped up often, as the pair wondered through the Viti Forest. Had Lupe possesed a second power? Had he passed it on to Sirius? Leo looked over at the cub as he said this, thinking of Sirius possesing the ability to see the future.
"Sirius." asked Leo, his voice taking on a serious tone. "Have you ever been able to...I don't know...look into water and see images, or something? Ever have visions?"
"Once I saw a flame flickering in the water...right before dad died actually..."

I leave them here, waiting for answers of Lupe & his mysterious death. As well as the power that Sirius may possess...

[Shadow of Darkness]

That's pretty good, but he COULD have some more personality. Try stuff like whether they're dark wolves or light wolves to begin with. That might make for a good start...

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Leo rushed in and seized his nephew, Sirius, before he too was destroyed by the killing, burning, searing hot flames. Leo saved him that day. But not Sirius' father, Lupe...

Leo was a proud brown & grey wolf, one of the breed that lives seemingly forever. In this case, Leo would live for 1000000 years. A million years to live. There had been three of his kin alive that he knew of, his brother, himself, and his nephew. Leo remembered quite clearly the day his brother perished in the fire that had almost claimed his nephew's short life too.
Leo was a brown & grey wolf with brown eyes. He was a rather stern and businesslike brute, but his heart always softened for Sirius. He loved his nephew, and he knew it well. Leo is definately a light brute, (pure) as he has always loved helping others.
Leo was a relatively lonely brute, as he had just himself and Sirius.
Leo was always a wise and knowledgeable brute, and others could always turn to him for advice. But, then again, at 853 years old, you can't blame those others! You wouldn't notice it at first though, as he appears to be only about three or four winters old.
Sirius is a young pure black cub, with silvery grey eyes. As a cub, he's fun-loving, and great to be around! But, he is a cub, and cubs are like that. Also because he's a cub, he doesn't understand much, but you can't blame him.
Sirius is one of those cubs you look at and think 'Awww, he's so cute! Look at his eyes, poor baby...' He's got big, sweet eyes, making him quite the target for love.
He's been exposed to so much at an early age, and is a bit depressed at the moment because of the death of his parents. Sirius has the ability to see into the future, but doesn't know it yet. But will soon find out.
Sirius has seen his own future, but hasn't told anyone. He's seen himself as an adult, and knows he will have a black, angry heart - a dark wolf.

"How long did your father tell you that you would live?" Leo asked the cub one day.
"Normal age of course." Sirius answered
"How old is normal? To most wolven."
"Like about 10 years. But that's the lucky ones. Why? How old am I going to live to be?"
"You and I shall live to be one million years old. It's in our blood and. If no disease touches us, and we aren't killed like your father did in the flames we shall FOREVER hate, we'll do fine."

Leo remembered this conversation with his nephew very well. Sirius hadn't known of this 'million years to live' thing until that exact moment.
Sirius had always been a fine cub, but knew little of what he should have known. Leo blamed Lupe for that. He always had blamed him for things like that.
Why hadn't Lupe told Sirius of this? Would he ever have told his own son of his ancestors' power? Had Lupe predicted that Sirius would be a little too proud?
Memories of Lupe stirred inside Leo's wolven mind. He remembered the first moment he ever could think of of he and Lupe playing. A good memory. Then his mind sped him up to Lupe's death. A death of fire. A harsh, terrible, hatred-worthy way to die.
All Leo thought of when this memory popped into his wolven mind was that at least he had died with the elements, and not by other wolven. He had not been murdered, he had died saving his son. Sirius would have perished alongside Lupe
had Leo not dove in to save him at the exact moment. Leo was a hero to Sirius, ever since the terrible fire that had not only destroyed Lupe, but the whole pack.
After Sirius learned of the life of his kin, he held his head high, proud to know he would live for so long. It was the best gift he had ever been given to know this. He thanked his uncle very much for teaching him of what must be known. What confused Sirius was, why had no one told him of this remarkable feat?

"Leo," said Lupe, looking up at his brother, "Can you tell me something?"
"Of course, my brother," said Leo, "What is it?"
"Make sure," he said, "that when Sirius gets older, you take care of him if I leave him."
"Of course."

Leo remembered that conversation too. He kept his promised, but wondered if Lupe knew what would happen? This question popped up often, as the pair wondered through the Viti Forest. Had Lupe possesed a second power? Had he passed it on to Sirius? Leo looked over at the cub as he said this, thinking of Sirius possesing the ability to see the future.
"Sirius." asked Leo, his voice taking on a serious tone. "Have you ever been able to...I don't know...look into water and see images, or something? Ever have visions?"
"Once I saw a flame flickering in the water...right before dad died actually..."

I leave them here, waiting for answers of Lupe & his mysterious death. As well as the power that Sirius may possess...